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I believe that my title for this essay was not very orginal. I need to work on fiinding better titles. I also need to focus on my thesis as it was non existent. I need to continue focusing a on my mistakes and make sure that my essay flows better in between paragraphs. I also need t work on clarifying my points Bethany correcting the occasional errors. I also need to outline better my essays in order to show an obvious organization.